Poem i wrote. Opinions wanted please.

[lillekat]

Actually, I don't think that is poetry - as far as I can see it's expressive prose - but it's really good all teh same

It makes you stop and think about what makes people tick and whether or not what they have is true happiness, or something they've simply created in order to fool not only those around them, but themselves.

keep it up!

 

[joecool]

Hey, thanks you ppl for all the encouragement

, i wrote a new one on thanksgiving when i was bored(and it took a little more than 90 seconds). Well, i didn't write it down, i just thought of it and didn't forget it. It is a lot shorter and im not sure what exactly it means. Here goes. And thanks again.

(And i know that this was the best place to put things like this, because ppl who love cats tend to be very intelligent and thoughtful.

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There are things contained within my mind
That nothing earthly can unbind,
No peering, prying eyes can find.