I have to write an essay for a scholarship application. The topic of the essay is "What is the most important invention in the last 50 years?" I have the essay written (hehe I didn't want you to write it for me!!). I'd just like opinions and someone that actually writes (I'm not that great of a writer) to give it a once over and basically tell me if it's good or not.
This scholarship is important! It's for $1000 and will pay for my first term of school!! I don't qualify for any financial aid because I'm not 24 yet and my mom and stepdad made more than $100,000 last year.. Even though I've been on my own since I was 17!!! Anyway.. blah. Here is the essay! Be completely honest please! You won't hurt my feelings at all. This is *VERY* important to me!
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The last half-century has engendered many innovations that have had a significant impact on our society. We, as people, are always striving to make things faster, smarter, and most importantly convenient. The pocket calculator, cellular phone, personal and notebook computers, and of course PDAs are all examples of our desire for convenient and intelligent inventions. However, the award for the most important invention in the past 50 years would have to be given to the force that drives these items-- the silicon chip.
This seemingly small object is a giant in technology. It has enabled communication to become pervasive and mobile. This tiny chip powers the infrastructure that has become what we know as the internet. The advent of cellular phones was made possible with the assistance of the silicon chip. This is just a small scratch on the surface of how our communication has been affected by this wondrous invention.
Beyond our communication advancements the Silicon Chip has played a major part in medical progression. It is constantly in use by millions of diabetic Americans to monitor the level of glucose in their blood. New mothers have gotten improved images of their babies while still in the womb, and recently it has been used in a surgical study to help provide vision to the blind. The influence the Silicon Chip has made in the medical field has been incredible.
Our economy has also been propelled by the inventions the silicon chip has made possible. Banks and financial markets are now empowered with the ability to move money faster and with more accuracy. Transportation has been made progressively cheaper and attainable in large part to navigational systems. Nearly every type of trade has been able to improve services to be quicker and increasingly available. Economies world wide have reaped the benefit of this powerful little chip.
In the past 50 years we have seen numerous inventions all of which have had an impact on our world. The Silicon Chip has made a large mark on our technological history by empowering and enabling very important innovations. Every day there are more ideas driven by the Silicon Chip that will come to fruition. History states that a new invention will come about that will have an even larger impact on our society, however, there can be no doubt that the Silicon Chip is definitely the most important and influential invention in the last half century.
This scholarship is important! It's for $1000 and will pay for my first term of school!! I don't qualify for any financial aid because I'm not 24 yet and my mom and stepdad made more than $100,000 last year.. Even though I've been on my own since I was 17!!! Anyway.. blah. Here is the essay! Be completely honest please! You won't hurt my feelings at all. This is *VERY* important to me!
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The last half-century has engendered many innovations that have had a significant impact on our society. We, as people, are always striving to make things faster, smarter, and most importantly convenient. The pocket calculator, cellular phone, personal and notebook computers, and of course PDAs are all examples of our desire for convenient and intelligent inventions. However, the award for the most important invention in the past 50 years would have to be given to the force that drives these items-- the silicon chip.
This seemingly small object is a giant in technology. It has enabled communication to become pervasive and mobile. This tiny chip powers the infrastructure that has become what we know as the internet. The advent of cellular phones was made possible with the assistance of the silicon chip. This is just a small scratch on the surface of how our communication has been affected by this wondrous invention.
Beyond our communication advancements the Silicon Chip has played a major part in medical progression. It is constantly in use by millions of diabetic Americans to monitor the level of glucose in their blood. New mothers have gotten improved images of their babies while still in the womb, and recently it has been used in a surgical study to help provide vision to the blind. The influence the Silicon Chip has made in the medical field has been incredible.
Our economy has also been propelled by the inventions the silicon chip has made possible. Banks and financial markets are now empowered with the ability to move money faster and with more accuracy. Transportation has been made progressively cheaper and attainable in large part to navigational systems. Nearly every type of trade has been able to improve services to be quicker and increasingly available. Economies world wide have reaped the benefit of this powerful little chip.
In the past 50 years we have seen numerous inventions all of which have had an impact on our world. The Silicon Chip has made a large mark on our technological history by empowering and enabling very important innovations. Every day there are more ideas driven by the Silicon Chip that will come to fruition. History states that a new invention will come about that will have an even larger impact on our society, however, there can be no doubt that the Silicon Chip is definitely the most important and influential invention in the last half century.
