Autumn poem

my cat mellow

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I am from England but currently live in Yorktown V
I have started blogging, and I aim to write a blog every day, I want to try and get better at writing and typing and encourage my creative mind, so not knowing what to write I started a poem, its the first one I have written since being at school (over 10 years
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I just wish the poem was true and it really was cold enough to snuggle, its still so humid here, I have the AC turned back on


seasons

Blue skies, Brown Leaves
Children playing thick as thieves
Shorter days longer nights
Forcing us to turn on lights
Cosy nights in, snuggled up close
another season passed us by
now its time for the Christmas roast

Criticism welcome


Do you think this line Forcing us to turn on lights should read Forcing us to turn on the lights
 

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It's fine as it is in my opinion. If you were to change it to turn on the lights the rhythm wouldn't quite be right.
 
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